Nov. 7 Trying to Come to Terms with my Daughter's Depression
I have been here before and don't rememberthis exact line of trees, the way brancheson the ground, leaves, seem out of place. The dog barksat nothing, her hackles mohawk in attemptto appear a threat....
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This is so touching and so well written, Hadley. I've reread three times. I love your "ghosts" turning line, the gypsies and the songs too wide for sound. Fabulous write!
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Yes, you've said a lot here, Hadley. I love the songs too wide for sound as well as the rest of the close. Encompasses sadness well.
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Love the way the first line contradicts itself before joining with the second . . . a great expression of the confusion that one feels at a loved one's suffering. Also, the way one...
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hi h, glad i didn't miss this. it,s good. you might try to put the last three senteneces each on. their own line that might convey more of the helplessness or sense of futility in "what can i say"?...
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The mood and images are just right. Really like the line about proud to possess their dirty faces and hands.
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Dang, this is good. I agree with Gretasue that not mentioning the daughter more specifically is what makes this work. A lot's to be learned about how to deal with white-hot emotion from your...
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Agree, agree. A really good poem, Hadley! Agree with Greta about how you never mentioned the daughter in the poem. The title is doing its work. Excellent work.
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thanks all sorry i haven't been back to crit others -- my laptop crashed after i posted this and i have no other computer at home to work on. i still haven't gotten the laptop back up (fingers...
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I hope not! So enjoy reading your work!
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yes H, i have my fingers crossed for your speedy resolution. i too had my compter crash, and am using my son's ipad, now waiting on my new one (new to me), to arrive. do rejoin us, else we will miss...
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I will try to come back. Right now I'm fretting about the potential lost poems on my computer. I haven't done a great job of backing things up. And actually I am very thankful that so many of my poems...
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